Thats awesome. Really nasty and predatory. The very kind of savage horror type stuff that should be coming out of Werewolf in fact. Very effective here as a personal theme for Rosethorn to contrast with the more common Hubris theme.
Can't think of anywhere to improve this, sorry.
A great thing with Rosethorn is she her torment changes and evolves overtime. Which keeps it interesting and saves her from breaking completly, as it is she keeps springing back.
One day I hope she will get her girl. Even if I have to get Darcy to hold her down with Zombies. ;)